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Sing me something cold and dreary
Of a sad small girl with a heart so weary
Of broken hearts and spririts lost
And miles and miles to traverse across

Sing me something filled with cheer
Whisper words only I can hear
For love's too slow and death's too quick
The thought of either makes me sick

Sing me something soft and sweet
That match the styles of my heartbeat
A pitter-patter so fast and soft
Your heart by mine sends me aloft

Sing me something filled with Hate
Of suburban lies from senseless dates
Tortured thoughts freed so fast
Reminding me that this could never last

Sing me something of remorse
Of forgotten romance lost its course
Treachery made of no such thought
Seems to me you already forgot

Sing to me that you don't care
Sing to me that it's not fair
I'll cry and say I'll be all right
But for my life this is the night

Sing the praises of another girl
Tell everyone that she's your world
As i just stay back and wait
For the perfect headstone date

Sing her lies of love now hers
While under your breath you slowly curse
And under mine I softly laugh
She'll be like me in your aftermath

Sing to her the lines once used
Tell her lies that you accuse
Subconsious musings running free
And now I know she's just like me

Sing me a beautiful lullabye
Because now it is my time to die
No worries, she'll come with me too
We're both so tired of people like you

Sing to us your useless chatter
But know now that it doesn't matter
It's too late now, we're too far gone
But you knew that much all along

SCREAM to the world your own fake tears
SCREAM that you knew this in your fears
SCREAM what you want, but most of all
SCREAM ME SOMETHING BEAUTIFUL!
©2006-2009 ~jifener
:iconjifener:

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i finally started writin again, this is what came out. NO REFLECTION ON MY REAL LIFE, ITS LIKE A STORY!

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:iconbatosi6915:
Amazing piece. Excellently written. I love it!:spyed:

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I can't embrace you while holding a sword

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:iconjifener:
thank you so much! i would love any critiques if you have any, i want to get better.

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:iconpickledweasel:
a beautiful story that just touches the heart. wonderful rhyming.

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Even in my own beliefs
Confusion reigns supreme
Nothing ever quite adds up
The answers escape me
-"Full Circle", Tramis-377
:icondragonyoko:
Everything except the last stanza fits perfectly within its self and it lovely, i just don't care for the way the last stanza forces itself upon the reader. Also, the last line is very strained and doesn't fit with the poem at all.

Hopefully it helps,
dragonyoko.

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My delusionary Hell does not agree with yours!-JTHM
:iconbatosi6915:
Your absolutely welcome. I'll try and give you some critiques later. I'm not too good at it, but I'll try. From at
least just reading that, I think your a very good writer.

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I can't embrace you while holding a sword

Part of this writing club-[link]

"We are the wall..."
:iconjifener:
well thanks so much!

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:icondmr13:
i love it baby it's really well written
:iconjifener:
thank you for the critique, i'll definatly work on that!

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:iconjifener:
thanks darren. do u have any critiques? lol

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